This is quite amazing. I love how you keep things interesting all throughout. One of my favs from this year's NGADM!
Thank you so much, so glad you liked it :]
In my very honest opinion, your writing style is very mechanical and unfitting to the scene you described and are trying to convey. I instead pictured maybe a village in a videogame, not something as profound as what you described in the author's comments. I should mention that I'm assuming it's profound, since you mentioned you considered it a delicate dream. Following the story of your dream, I suppose the intro of the song would be fitting; wandering around the forest. Mysteries here and there. The rest of the song, though, I would've personally done very differently. Mostly, I would've written something more melancholic for the end, and maybe finish it off on a mysterious (but not too wild) note. This is assuming you meant to visit that girl again.
Having gotten that out of the way, I do think it's rather unfair to judge your song based on what MY vision was, so here's actual thoughts on what you DO have. I do insist that the scene you mentioned inspired you isn't the scene I feel this song conveys, but it's not misguided, either. You've a very pleasant ambiental sound going through the whole thing. It's all very relaxing, albeit a little dull in the long run. This does bug me because I've gathered from your other songs that you have many more writing and production tricks and skills that I think you could've used here to make at least some sections a little less plain. The only way I can come up with to describe exactly what I'm thinking is to say that I feel you highlighted the wrong things.
Don't get me wrong, though, I tend to only mention bad things in my comments, but that doesn't mean I think your song is bad. Like I mentioned before, I think it's rather chill and enjoyable. Great work!!
this is SIMPLY me showing off i can do delicate songs as well :)
maybe delicate is the wrong word.. from what i remember in the dream the girl was delicate but she is not fragile/weak there was something about her and when she ask when will i comeback she did not sound needy either.... and she was telling me other stuff too but i cant remember :P
anyways to put it short the girl was not a fragile existence. the girl along with the alien scenery full of flowers.. isnt fragile and just because its delicate doesnt mean its weak :) so yeah and i felt happy after this dream so i wouldnt write anything melancholic and i dont expect anyone to "fully" understand either since this is my own experience
appreciate the review
What I would've done for that 3:20 transition that everyone is yapping about would've probably been to extend that section before just a little bit and perhaps in that extended section go for a closure feeling, as if the song was ending here, and once it's pretty much "ended", kick back in.
I personally enjoyed it the couple times I listened to it, though I can see how it could become repetitive to others, but I also know the fix! Add some vocals to this, man.
5 stars as in it's perfect and these are only ideas on taking it further, not to fix something that's not broken.
I had some effects lined up to time sync with it, but it was just too messy and too late. I think a longer pause or quick swell of some sort would have smoshed it up.
It will be retwiddled eventually!
I have absolutely no clue how to describe what you've got here, but this is somewhere on my top 3 favorite submissions. I tend to hate electronic but damn, this is great.
IDM dance hybrids prob the best/simplest descriptor. Thanks for not hating it!
Got my eyes on you though...
Son of a bitch, that intro was epic (and intimidating, contest-wise) as f***! It blew me away as much as InvisibleObserver's bass intro in "Lying to a Stranger" did. It's the kind of thing you don't hear ever, and when people try it, they fail, but you succeeded. It's the perfect hook and impression you needed to deliver to capture the listener for the remainder of the song. So great work there! Like, very great.
On to the rest of the song. I really wish I could say that the entire thing is as epic as the intro. It's not bad in the least. It's very good, but unfortunately, I can't help but feel it doesn't go in par with the initial idea, as good as the transition might've been. For one, I feel like the kind of metal you chose to employ was a little superficial in comparison with the deep elements that your flamenco boasts. Maybe it's just missing something. I'm not sure. In other words, the flamenco is a lot more interesting than the metal here.
I think I'll stop there and remind you that you worked with a pair of genres that are rarely, if ever, mixed together, and you did so in a way that very few would be able to. One last tiny comment would be that maybe the ending could be reworked to give better closure to such an amazing piece. But all in all, brilliant!
Hey Wolftacular! Awesome review! I actually agree with you. I should had kept it simple and stayed with flamenco... I've never heard something like this in here, so I think it would have been better recieved than the actual song. I think I'll give it another try to the flamenco stuff later... maybe for my EP...
Thanks for reviewing!
Pulling intro, solid follow-through... oof, great switch! Could use some polishing for greater impact. The lighter instruments add very warming touches!! I really like them. Be careful of 2:26-2:35; it sounds extremely familiar. I feel like the change after that needs a little polishing to either make an impact or be more subtle; it feels a little rough. The speed-up, I adored, though!! It's insane!!
Experimental, I think, but very well executed! Not many people can pull so many changes without it feeling forced or like bs, and you went the whole way, changing even the genre, so I congratulate you! All of them are neat! Except maybe for the ending one. That one I didn't like too much :c
I don't know what to say about 2:26-2:35 because it's a melody I really did pull from my own head! The bassline is fairly common in cheesy romantic songs so perhaps that's what you might be thinking of.
I kinda derped on the mixing of the end with the synth since I was working on that right up until the deadline. I quickly remixed it and re-uploaded. Unless you're talking about the ending with the 16 bar drum roll. That one I just left in to troll SkyeWintrest.
I hear a lot of Lion King influence and rhythm in here (I know it's of African influence, and it could be me, but I hear a lot from the style of whoever wrote that soundtrack) as well as some familiar chords that make me feel "at home", so to speak. I really like that you took it down your own path though, and I think that's a path of a load of potential that I think shouldn't be ignored for the sake of simplicity.
To spare your time, I should just say that I love it and see (almost) nothing wrong in it, but that doesn't mean it couldn't be even better! Definitely something you should look into if you ever get around to replacing those low choirs, which I think sound maybe like your voice lowered several octaves? o3o
Don't know, but brilliant work all around!
Oh, man, totally. Loved the Lion King as a child and its soundtrack has stuck with me forever. And yep, I had no basses around so I kind of had to create my own!
Glad you like it though, Wolf. Thanks for the review ^__^
Damn, those are some high notes you're hitting, at least for me. I think it's a very neat cover! Definitely pays quite a tribute to the original. Good work!
Thanks! Yeah I can sing high xD... I think 'cause my voice is high pitched, that makes it easier for me to hit those notes...
I still think my singing is not that great, but it is fun to sing though :D...
I'm looking forward to hear your submission for round 3, dood... I'll be finishing mine soon ;)
Oh god, I like the idea, but the chords just sound so off. I'm sorry, it completely killed it for me.
I see. Well, I still think the chords are good hahah. Thanks for your input though!
A secret lab if he didn't know where it was? XDD
Man, this thing made me laugh so much!!
And shit, I'm at awe with the quality of your mic!!!!!!!!!!
Btw, I'm honored you used my song :')
I'm glad that you liked it man! Yeah I really like the new mic, it's great! Of course I used one of your songs, you create amazing pieces of music dude!
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